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While Noble Sissle may be best known for his collaboration with Eubie Blake, as both a vaudeville performer and as a lyricist for songs and Broadway musicals, also enjoying an independent career as a singer with such groups as Hahn's Jubilee Singers.
(A) and as a lyricist for songs and Broadway musicals, also enjoying
(B) and writing lyrics for songs and Broadway musicals, also enjoying
(C) and a lyricist for songs and Broadway musicals, he also enjoyed
(D) as well as writing lyrics for songs and Broadway musicals, he also enjoyed
(E) as well as a lyricist for songs and Broadway musicals, he had also enjoyed

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Sentence Analysis

  • While Noble Sissle may be best known for his collaboration with Eubie Blake, (Dependent clause. Subject ? "Noble Sissle"; Verb ? "may be known")
    • as (modifies "collaboration)
      • both a vaudeville performer
      • and as a lyricist for songs and Broadway musicals,
    • also enjoying an independent career as a singer with such groups as Hahn's Jubilee Singers. (Verb-ing modifier modifying the preceding dependent clause)

The sentence seems to present a contrast using "while". The contrast is between the following two facts:

  1. Noble Sissle is best known for his collaboration with Eubie Blake
  2. He had an independent career as a singer

The sentence has the following errors:

  1. As is, the sentence doesn?t have a main clause, and "enjoying" is acting as a clause modifier for the "while" clause even though the information in the "enjoying" phrase seems to present a contrast to the clause.
  2. Lack of parallelism: In the structure "both X and Y", X and Y need to be parallel elements. However, "a vaudeville performer" and "as a lyricist" are not parallel. Either both need to have at the beginning "as" or both need to be without "as".

Option Analysis

(A) Incorrect . For the reasons mentioned above.

(B) Incorrect . For the following reasons:

  1. Error no. 1 of the original sentence
  2. Lack of parallelism: "a vaudeville performer" and "writing lyrics" are not parallel

(C) Correct . This option corrects both the errors in the original sentence without introducing any new error.

(D) Incorrect . For the following reasons:

  1. "Both X as well as Y" is non-idiomatic.
  2. Error no. 2 of option B

(E) Incorrect . For the following reasons:

  1. "Both X as well as Y" is non-idiomatic.
  2. The use of past perfect "had enjoyed" is incorrect since there is no event in the simple past tense with which this information needs to be sequenced.
answered Jun 3, 2017 by Beginner (1 point)
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While Noble Sissle may be best known for his collaboration with Eubie Blake, as both a vaudeville performer and as a lyricist for songs and Broadway musicals, also enjoying an independent career as a singer with such groups as Hahn's Jubilee Singers.
Meaning : NS may be best known for his collaboration with EB, as both a VP and a L. He also enjoyed X.
We have sentence structure as while + Clause, Clause
(A) and as a lyricist for songs and Broadway musicals, also enjoying
Two issues:
1) Both X and Y -> where X and Y should be parallel.
as both a VL and as a Lyrists -> we don't have top repeat "as" again.
2) we require another clause but we have "enjoying" which cannot be a verb. It can be a modifier. For continuous tense , we require an auxiliary verb "is/are/were" etc.

(B) and writing lyrics for songs and Broadway musicals, also enjoying
two issues:
1) "Writing lyrics" is not parallel to "a vaudeville performer".
2) Same issue as option A)

(C) and a lyricist for songs and Broadway musicals, he also enjoyed
-> Correct
(D) as well as writing lyrics for songs and Broadway musicals, he also enjoyed
Two issues:
1) As well as -> is not part of the idiom Both X and Y
2) "Writing lyrics" is not parallel to "a vaudeville performer"

(E) as well as a lyricist for songs and Broadway musicals, he had also enjoyed
Two issues:
1) Same issue as option D) -> Both X and Y
2) had -> changes the tense to past perfect and since we don't require ordering of two events, past perfect is not required.

answered Jun 3, 2017 by Beginner (21 points)
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