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At the end of the 1930s, Duke Ellington was looking for a composer to assist him- someone not only who could arrange music for his successful big band, but mirroring his eccentric writing style as well in order to finish the many pieces he had started but never completed.
(A) someone not only who could arrange music for his successful big band, but mirroring his eccentric writing style as well in order to finish
(B) someone who could not only arrange music for his successful big band, but also mirror his eccentric writing style in order to finish
(C) someone who not only could arrange music for his successful big band, but also to mirror his eccentric writing style in finishing
(D) that being someone who could not only arrange music for his successful big band, but mirroring his eccentric writing style for finishing
(E) being someone not only who could arrange music for his successful big band, but mirror his eccentric writing style as well, finishing

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Hi, there. I'm happy to help with this one.
This is OG13 SC #4, a new question that does not appear in OG12 .
The BIG IDEA of this question is the " not only .... but also " idiom. The "not only" phrase appears in all five answer choices, and on the GMAT, every "not only" has to be followed by a "but only."
Right away, that eliminates (A) & (D) & (E), leaving only (B) and (C).
Now we have to look at parallelism, because in the construction "not only X but also Y", X and Y must be in parallel.
In (B) we have
= could not only arrange music
= but also mirror
verb "arrange" correctly parallel with verb "mirror"
In (C) we have
= not only could arrange music
= but also to mirror
One is a verb and the other is an infinitive, so this is a failure of parallelism. Also, notice the common word "could" either needs to be totally outside ---- "could not only X but also Y" --- or it need to appear in both terms ---- "not only could X but also could Y". 
For a variety of reasons, (C) is incorrect, so we are left with (B) as the best answer.
 

 

answered May 31, 2017 by Beginner (21 points)
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Solution

Sentence Analysis

  • At the end of the 1930s, (Prepositional phrase modifying the main verb)
  • Duke Ellington was looking for a composer to assist him ? (Main Clause. Main Subject ? "Duke Ellington"; Main Verb ? "was looking")
    • someone (beginning of a Noun + Noun modifier for "composer")
      • not only who could arrange music for his successful big band , (First element in the list modifying "someone")
      • but mirroring his eccentric writing style as well (Second element in the list modifying "someone")
        • in order to finish the many pieces (modifies "mirroring")
          • he had started but never completed. (relative clause with "that" skipped, modifying "pieces")

The sentence says that at the end of the 1930s, Duke Ellington was looking for a composer to assist him. The composer needed to have the below two qualities:

  1. He must be able to arrange music for Duke?s successful band
  2. He must be able to mirror Duke?s writing style so that Duke could finish his incomplete pieces.

The sentence has the following errors:

  1. "Not only_but as well" is non-idiomatic. The correct idiom is either "not only_but also" or "not only_but".
  2. The relative clause "who could arrange_" is not parallel to the verb-ing phrase "mirroring_".
  3. Using verb-ing phrase "mirroring his_" to modify "someone" leads to the structure "someone mirroring his_". This structure produces a distorted meaning that the composer is mirroring Duke?s eccentric style at the same time as "Duke was looking for the composer".

Option Analysis

(A) Incorrect . For the reasons mentioned above.

(B) Correct . This option corrects all the errors in the original sentence without introducing any new error.

(C) Incorrect . For the following reasons:

  1. The verb phrase "could arrange_" is not parallel to the infinitive phrase "to mirror_".
  2. "mirror his eccentric writing style in finishing_" means that the composer needs to mirror the eccentric style only in this particular task (finishing the incomplete pieces). However, the original sentence meant that the composer needs to have the ability to mirror his eccentric style so that the incomplete pieces could be finished. The original sentence seems more meaningful.

(D) Incorrect . For the following reasons:

  1. "that being" not only is redundant but also distorts the meaning since "being" indicates temporary state.
  2. The verb phrase "arrange music_" is not parallel to verb-ing phrase "mirroring his eccentric_".
  3. The intent is most clearly expressed using "in order to finish" rather than using "for following".

(E) Incorrect . For the following reasons:

  1. Error no. 1 of option D
  2. The relative clause "who could_" is not parallel to verb-phrase "mirror his_".
  3. Error no. 1 of the original sentence.
  4. The use of ?finishing? as a verb-ing modifier modifying the preceding clause is incorrect since it doesn?t provide relevant additional information about the previous clause.
answered May 31, 2017 by Beginner (1 point)
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